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Mom, Dad and Me! (ABBA or Mirror Poem)


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Mom, Dad and Me!
(ABBA or Mirror Poem)
gurunAthan ramaNi

Dad
Phone and pad
dad alone!

Mom
Mom is sweet 
with a bright face!
She's graceful, upright 
neat and calm.

Me
I'm their pet child, 
mild, and I get
all their time.

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  • 1 month later...
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Really nice, gurunAthan! (Well-composed, too.) This one brought a smile to my face.

Tony 🙂

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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Thanks, Tony.

gurunAthan

 

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This short poem tells me details of a young family with intentional alliterations. Is the narrator the only child because it ended with "I get all their time"? 

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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Yes, it is about an imagined only child, Joel Josol. As Tinker would explain the ABBA poetic form uses internal rhymes, in reverse order: 

Phone and pad
dad alone!

Really educative, her explanations, to try the forms as exercises or full blown poems. 

And no, this poem is not about the narrator, but about an imagined first person.

gurunAthan

 

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