gurunAthan Posted December 29, 2020 Share Posted December 29, 2020 My Little Angel!(Chant) gurunAthan ramaNi Come on, Cuckoos, sing her a song, My little angel's out on the lawn! Hey Mynah look, with your lovely eyes, My little angel's out on the lawn! Dear Roses, bloom but do not blush My little angel's out on the lawn! O Butterfly, show her your colors, My little angel's out on the lawn! Wait a little, O Rising Sun, My little angel's out on the lawn! Blow softly, gently, O Zephyr My little angel's out on the lawn! Just now, all is right with her world, My little angel's out on the lawn! ★★★★★ Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted December 31, 2020 Share Posted December 31, 2020 I like the happy tone of the poem though I could not recognize the form. But it reminded me of forms like villanelle where a line repeats itself in every stanza. There is no strict meter either per line that I can perceive. 1 Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
gurunAthan Posted December 31, 2020 Author Share Posted December 31, 2020 Thanks JoelJosel. I based my verse on Tinker's explanation of the Chant form below. I took liberty with the meter in the first line, and made the second line repeat itself. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted January 2, 2021 Share Posted January 2, 2021 gurunAthan, I like the simple (not simplistic!) movement and refrain of this bright poem. A nice chant to capture a moment of delight and abandonment to innocence. Thank You, - David Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
gurunAthan Posted January 6, 2021 Author Share Posted January 6, 2021 Thank you for your kind words, David. gurunAthan Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
gurunAthan Posted January 10, 2021 Author Share Posted January 10, 2021 2 hours ago, AbsentShadow said: A happy poem indeed! What is this poetic form? Is it your own? Thank you, AbsentShadow. The poem is based on Tinker's explanation of the Chant form here: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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