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Jesus leaves a wilderness with thoughts like fires
in the sun, he is a parasol that
prevents the devil's tears from tearing fibres
out of God's eye-patch the sun. The tears start
to mingle, weeping fire,beatific bawls,
blood falls from a man on a cross, a stone
is rolled from a cave entrance,a sun flails
against the vision of a father whose throne
created for a son cannot be attained.
To preempt God,Jesus whispers into a womb
and the kick inside cannot be contained
for him and the earth. A father's hands loom
over a planet and an unborn child they
are shaken by a lone Mother who prays.

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David W. Parsley

Barry, this treatment of one of the Eclipse Narratives is particularly fraught with difficulties of every stripe. The form seems stretched to the point of damage with the enormity of its theme.  I have more to say but would like to hear from others before going there.

 - David

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I find David's remarks intriguing. I don't feel qualified to chime in on the content, but I will say that the poem seems remarkably concentrated, intense. I'm looking forward to David's additional thoughts.


Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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