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           Chardonnay

From surf-side golden hour with orchids,
aloe, and sea mist all around,
it leaves us, cast, like those cold peaks
in far-off, stony alpenglow;

it’s blue hour now. Now, brag, drag, under-
tow, we're all awash in afterglow.
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Golden hour
Alpenglow
Blue hour

Afterglow

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Very evocative, very good. Absolutely love this

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12 hours ago, tonyv said:

Taipei_night_2015 rss50.jpg

           Chardonnay

From surf-side golden hour with orchids,
aloe, and sea mist all around,
it leaves us, cast, like those cold peaks
in far-off, stony alpenglow;

it’s blue hour now. Now, brag, drag, under-
tow, we're all awash in afterglow.
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Great title Tony. Googling golden/blue hour enlightened my experience of the poem. Like the geographical plays of tropical and mountainous, the meaning of alpenglow' was another jewel.The poem does leave the reader with an afterglow.

muchly enjoyed

Phil

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On 7/24/2021 at 10:25 AM, badger11 said:

Great title Tony. Googling golden/blue hour enlightened my experience of the poem. Like the geographical plays of tropical and mountainous, the meaning of alpenglow' was another jewel.The poem does leave the reader with an afterglow.

muchly enjoyed

Phil

Thank you, Phil. I'm glad this one resonated! I'm also excited that you noticed the tropical/mountainous juxtapositioning.

For some interesting reading, we have:

Golden hour
Alpenglow
Blue hour

... and let's not overlook the Belt of Venus.

Tony 🙂

 

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David W. Parsley

Yes, the Belt of Venus is tangible here, without a single direct statement to usher it in.  I also liked the sprinkle of l-o and l-oo combinations awash in all those surfy sibilants.  The afterglow is palpable!

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 - Dave

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On 8/14/2021 at 9:44 PM, David W. Parsley said:

Yes, the Belt of Venus is tangible here, without a single direct statement to usher it in.  I also liked the sprinkle of l-o and l-oo combinations awash in all those surfy sibilants.  The afterglow is palpable!

Thanks,
 - Dave

Thank you, Dave! I love your observations re the linguistics!

Tony 😊

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I am convinced that this short poem captured in a few well-chosen words a consistent image - golden glow - from title to the rhythm of the poem.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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On 10/2/2021 at 6:11 AM, JoelJosol said:

I am convinced that this short poem captured in a few well-chosen words a consistent image - golden glow - from title to the rhythm of the poem.

Thank you, Joel, for your kind remarks. I like what you've noted about the consistency.

Tony 

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