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dreams -

under your avocado tree

you and I sit

before I forget you’ve died

will you talk to me?

 

 

 

 

goldenlangur

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Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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dreams -

under your avocado tree

you and I sit

before I forget you’ve died

will you talk to me?

 

 

goldenlangur

 

Goldenlangur, I adore this short poem. It is amazing. Deep and emotional. And so clever question, before becomes late for anything...

Wonderful expressed. And wonderful imagery.

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

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I like how this starts out with a recognition of the dream-like state. It then shifts logically into otherworldliness. I wonder if you meant to say "remember you've died" rather than "forget you've died"? But either way works for me: something in this poem tells me the narrator will never forget.

 

Tony

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goldenlangur

" before its too late "

 

Hi Aleksandra,

 

 

You read well that sense that it may dissipate before one can grasp it.

 

 

... question, before becomes late for anything...

Aleksandra

 

 

Thank-you very much for a great response.

 

goldenlangur

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Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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goldenlangur

'remember'

 

Hi Tony,

 

 

You're quite spot on - I began with 'remember' and then changed to 'forget' to get a sense of clinging on and then a shift from dream to reality.

Certainly never to forget, you observe so perceptively.

 

 

Thank-you very much,

 

 

goldenlangur

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Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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Haunting......but not with a personal regret.....no, not that.......I sense more of a pleasant recollection of something that was too intoxicating for you to 'forget'. Ah, poetry !

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Hi gl, I love reading your work. It carries a simple clarity that I never get tired of experiencing.

 

Reading this poem, I was struck by the order of the images....

 

dreams --- you set the tone

under your avacado tree -- your settings always have a uniqueness

you and I sit --- simply stated the who without complication

before I forget you've died --- the surprise - a need to hold on to reality

will you talk to me? --- the twist, the need to hold on to the dream

 

So well done, memorable. I read this poem 3 times, then began my comment, I wrote the entire poem, line for line with small comments from memory... that is how impressive it was.

 

~~Tink

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Thank you pawn shop for your thoughts here.

 

Yes, poetry is something to remember and enjoy!

 

 

 

goldenlangur

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Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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goldenlangur

How rewarding!

 

 

Hi Tink,

 

How rewarding your detailed review! I appreciate very much how you've looked at the images and the way they link together in this piece.

 

Your perception and the consideration with which you have analyzed this piece are indeed gratifying.

 

 

Thank you so much.

 

goldenlangur

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Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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