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Change is the ocean bellowing into your stomach
The waves pushing you down
Not because you weren’t ready
But because you did not know how to handle it
It’s picking up your bags and walking out
With no plan and no ability to think
the ocean does not let you get up right away
Change does not let you get up right away
But that time that you struggle to stand
Is the most empowering time of all.

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David W. Parsley

Hello Ms. M, welcome to the Forum.  I like this piece quite a bit.  The bottomless pit that develops in one's stomach when one takes those first decisive (if wobbly!) steps into a changed sphere of destiny, walking out onto the high wire of existence with no supports: well stated, though indirectly, and conducive to the wind-whip clothing of symbol.

Well Done,
- Dave

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Welcome, Margaret. I like this poem and its presentation.

I couldn't care less about the abstraction "change," though I get the concept, and I can even romanticize it. What I feel is:

... It’s picking up your bags and walking out
With no plan and no ability to think

... and how the ocean (like "change"):

does not let you get up right away.

I've enjoyed your inaugural submission. I can feel the undertow. I'm excited that you've joined.

Tony

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Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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JoelJosol

This is only the second poem of Margaret. I like the metaphor of the ocean and change and the struggle described in the poem. Reminds of beach experiences where the site is a surf site. Relatable. Thanks.

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"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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