Tinker Posted March 8, 2022 Share Posted March 8, 2022 WidowHis ashes spread upon the sea;she, left to honor and grieve.Frozen in her inherent duties,smothered by a cloak of tasksthat transition from death to life, she utters one last goodbye.She, left to honor and grieve,his ashes spread upon the sea. ~~Judi Van Gorder 3 Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted April 1, 2022 Share Posted April 1, 2022 Chilling and mighty good. J 1 Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted April 10, 2022 Share Posted April 10, 2022 Judi, I can only imagine this cold light of day, when everything else becomes inconsequential and is, seemingly, stripped away. A somber, eloquent, and dignified work. With sympathy, Tony 1 Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted April 20, 2022 Share Posted April 20, 2022 On 3/8/2022 at 7:36 PM, Tinker said: Frozen in her inherent duties,smothered by a cloak of tasks How mundane the everyday seems in the midst of grief. You’ve caught that mix of the mindless routine and numbing grief so beautifully. Deep sympathy, Tink goldenlangur 1 1 Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted April 20, 2022 Author Share Posted April 20, 2022 OMG goldenlangur, I have so missed you. Thank you for your empathy. I am doing OK. Just starting a new life and wondering what direction to take. Hearing from you is such a gift. I hope you are still writing. Reading your response made my day! Happy belated birthday by the way. ~~Tink 1 Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted April 30, 2022 Share Posted April 30, 2022 Judi, you demonstrated that the best way for others to see an emotion is just by describing its physical appearance. I get the impression that the only abstract part "transitioning from death to life" is sort of returning to normal life routines, as if the ritual gesture has closed an era that will just become history, and we are now back to the present. We all know that is the heaviest part. 1 1 Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted June 12, 2022 Share Posted June 12, 2022 Judi, I am gratified to see that you are able to grapple almost in real time with events in your life, with spontaneous-seeming poetry. I particularly admire the "found" elements in this poem, such as the refraining spread of ashes. Please accept my deepest Sympathy, - Dave 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mikejewett Posted June 13, 2022 Share Posted June 13, 2022 A nice piece to honora loved one. I'd start the poem after the image as the words shouldn't be constrained next to it. 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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