rhymeguy Posted May 26, 2009 Share Posted May 26, 2009 Just a rhyme or two real quick thrown at the wall See if it sticks. If it’s done, or so they say, it sticks like red to Georgia clay. Doesn’t matter if it makes sense; for good or ill no consequence. Oh dear reader best beware Secrete meaning’s hidden there. If you search it you may find what is really on my mind. Fret and furrow of the brow, dig up the truth with mental plow Rhyme is descent; rhythm fair; but what else is hidden there? I could tell you but that’s no fun. Just let me know when you are done. One last verse to say farewell and let you know I’ll never tell. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted May 26, 2009 Share Posted May 26, 2009 Hi Rhymeguy, A riddle and you've got me stumped. You are right though the rhyme is descent and the rhythm is more than fair but whatever is hidden there remains a mystery to me. It doesn't have an acrostic message, nor does it give clues I can grasp in the imagery.. I do like the images of " red on Georgia clay" and "mental plow" which lead me to believe we are meant to dig a little deeper. Hmmmmmmm. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 26, 2009 Share Posted May 26, 2009 I, too, especially like the images Tinker mentioned. Always it seems there's something sinister below the surface of your rhymes, Rhymeguy. Carefully timed mentions of secret meanings and farewell arouse suspiscion. What is really on your mind??? Do tell! Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 26, 2009 Share Posted May 26, 2009 love the rhythm in the poem, it flows and is well organized. larsen aka victor Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lake Posted May 26, 2009 Share Posted May 26, 2009 You do rhyme well, rhymeguy. And the rhyme seems it comes so easy to you not as what you said in the poem "fret and furrow", "mental plow". You've done well. I read it as a defense of using rhyme in poetry, is it? What triggered it? I like the flow of the language here. Cheers, Lake Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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