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Phases of the Moon


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mikejewett

Hi, I'm Mike and I'm new here. I'll be commenting on other posts shortly.

Phases of the Moon

Whenever the sweet-scented
calyx of palm collects the blue
midday sun in your hair, I sit
passing time in the moon’s
phases and listen to the roaring
silence of thousands of fireflies.

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Welcome, Mike. I'm delighted that you've joined.

"The blue midday sun in your hair" is particularly striking and much to my liking. I'm also excited by the almost-sense of confusion I get as midday and night seem to conflict and coexist within the confines of this short poem. I get the same effect from the "thousands" of fireflies which, ostensibly, should light up the night like flames and embers roaring upward from a bonfire, yet their "silence" seems only to enhance the darkness, the blackness of night.

Excellent work. I'm looking forward to enjoying more of your poems.

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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JoelJosol

Powerful imagery. I like the cadence. The image of a calyx in my mind catching the sun is intriguing.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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Hi Mike,  Nice introduction, I'm sorry I'm late in welcoming you. 

After reading this first post, I am excited to see what other gems you will provide for us to savor.  I loved the imagery and rhythm of this piece.

Admittedly I had to look up "calyx" and now I'm challenged to use this word myself.  😎

So glad you've joined us.

~~Tink

~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com

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