mikejewett Posted July 31, 2022 Share Posted July 31, 2022 No Violets Moonup, shades of sangria hazed in mothwing dust motes. We wrap in flannel, tartan Seattle warmth accompanied by smudging sticks. Batteries never charged — defibrillator shock. Flatline. You said no violets (you didn't mean it). Moondown takes time — scores of swaying shadows to arc the parsecs. Inherit starlight, bank it, never blink; wet stones echo in the noise of stars. 2 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted August 1, 2022 Share Posted August 1, 2022 Some lovely phrasing Mike. mothwing dust and wet stones echo in particular. Phil Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted August 28, 2022 Share Posted August 28, 2022 Mike, this is excellent. I love the mood. While it's perfectly fine that you posted it here in overflow, let me know if you want it moved to the main showcase forum. This forum is only visible to signed in users. Tony 1 Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted August 28, 2022 Share Posted August 28, 2022 Mike, like Tony I am thoroughly taken by the mood set by the tone, diction, and imagery. The closing stanzas take me There. Thanks, - David 2 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mikejewett Posted August 29, 2022 Author Share Posted August 29, 2022 Phil, Tony, and David - thank you for your kind words. Tony, that's fine, thanks! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted August 29, 2022 Share Posted August 29, 2022 Done! Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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