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Thoughts on Nature - Critique very much appreciated


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What I Saw Today

 

Ahead:

Blue sky

Hazy air

Square farms

Roads here, there

 

To left:

Gray rocks

Scary cracks

Large cliff!

Just relax…

 

To right:

Gray lines

Tall green tree

City

My fam - ily

 

Behind:

Dirt trail

Many roots

Dark cave

Prints from shoes

 

All around:

Nature

Humbling sights

Things that

Words can’t describe

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Some others:

Things That Stood Out

 

Rough rocks

Small caves

Green farm

High ways

Plant stalks

Weedy yard

tight roads

funny folks

fat toads

 

 

Some free-ish verse:

 

Before me is a fatal

                                     drop.

in front of this ROCK

i sit c a l m y atop

Far away from all the

highways     cars     smoke      trash

I could hike this trail for days

     but... Would I?

i'll go see my family now... i miss their laugh 🙂

 

 

 

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