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Does Heaven have opening
Hours. Father
And son's eyes meet
Across unfinished watchtowers that would
Be completed in the mind
Of a messiah and
The rest of mankind, Borrowed echoes from a
Wilderness,
God is experienced
Beyond the
Senses. They
Decided crimes for a
Kings arrest, he
Timed the tides of ocean
Of shadows. Disciples
Are reflected in God's
Tears that fell with drops of blood.
Did God flood a
Mothers womb with
Heavenly light then explore.
A vanished body and
Empty tomb, a hand
Emerges from a wound
Holding the earth.
 
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Barry, there is profundity running throughout --

On 12/24/2022 at 5:09 AM, incantation said:
God is experienced
Beyond the
Senses ...

-- and:

On 12/24/2022 at 5:09 AM, incantation said:
... They
Decided crimes for a
Kings arrest ...

leading up to that especially powerful image of:

A vanished body and
Empty tomb ...

Nice work! And Merry Christmas!

Tony

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David W. Parsley

Count me in, too, Barry.  Highly original imagery tugging different corners of Christian thought and experience to narrate this encounter with one of our most gripping myths (a myth that is true, in this case!).  The opening and closing lines hold perhaps the greatest impact for this reader.

On 12/24/2022 at 2:09 AM, incantation said:
Does Heaven have opening
Hours. Father
And son's eyes meet
Across unfinished watchtowers...
 
 
Did God flood a
Mothers womb with
Heavenly light then explore.
A vanished body and
Empty tomb, a hand
Emerges from a wound
Holding the earth.
 

I'm a big fan of ambiguity but would recommend dividing the number of "a" occurrences in the poem by 2.

Thanks for This!
- David

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