incantation Posted December 24, 2022 Share Posted December 24, 2022 Does Heaven have opening Hours. Father And son's eyes meet Across unfinished watchtowers that would Be completed in the mind Of a messiah and The rest of mankind, Borrowed echoes from a Wilderness, God is experienced Beyond the Senses. They Decided crimes for a Kings arrest, he Timed the tides of ocean Of shadows. Disciples Are reflected in God's Tears that fell with drops of blood. Did God flood a Mothers womb with Heavenly light then explore. A vanished body and Empty tomb, a hand Emerges from a wound Holding the earth. 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted December 26, 2022 Share Posted December 26, 2022 Barry, there is profundity running throughout -- On 12/24/2022 at 5:09 AM, incantation said: God is experienced Beyond the Senses ... -- and: On 12/24/2022 at 5:09 AM, incantation said: ... They Decided crimes for a Kings arrest ... leading up to that especially powerful image of: A vanished body and Empty tomb ... Nice work! And Merry Christmas! Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted December 31, 2022 Share Posted December 31, 2022 Barry, A deeply moving piece. Thank you for sharing this. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted January 1, 2023 Share Posted January 1, 2023 Count me in, too, Barry. Highly original imagery tugging different corners of Christian thought and experience to narrate this encounter with one of our most gripping myths (a myth that is true, in this case!). The opening and closing lines hold perhaps the greatest impact for this reader. On 12/24/2022 at 2:09 AM, incantation said: Does Heaven have opening Hours. Father And son's eyes meet Across unfinished watchtowers... Did God flood a Mothers womb with Heavenly light then explore. A vanished body and Empty tomb, a hand Emerges from a wound Holding the earth. I'm a big fan of ambiguity but would recommend dividing the number of "a" occurrences in the poem by 2. Thanks for This! - David Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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