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Praying Filipina


Assaf1981

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She may be young,

She may be small,

She may even

Be southeast Asian.

Yet do not

Discount her so soon,

For she is nimble,

And she is quick.

 

This young lady,

Barefoot,

And wearing standard

PT gear

And wearing a small pin

Depicting a flag:

A red and blue flag,

With a triangle

At the hoist,

Depicting a sun

At it’s centre

And three stars

At each point

Of the triangle;

her country's flag!


As said before,

Discount her not,

For looks do deceive.

 

For, Behold;

With her staff;

She swings and thrusts,

And parries,

With the grace of a cat,

Taking down

All foes

supernatural

Winning it all,

For her homeland,

For her host country,

And for her 

countrywomen

In her special regiment,

And even for

her homeworld;

The planet Earth!

However,

 most importantly,

she also fights

For her Lord and Saviour,

As evidenced by

Her genuflecting,

With her head bowed,

And her staff held

In an upright manner!

 

See! Above her,

against the

unadorned

Background,

A pair of rings,

Green, floating rings,

Resembling eyes,

Hover above,

Seemingly spectral,

To which she pays

No notice.

What are those rings?

Are they the eyes

Of a friend,

Sent by her Lord

And saviour to guide

And protect

Her and her regiment?

Or are they

the eyes of

A supernatural

Malefactor,

The likes of which

She is sworn to fight?

 

That, dear reader

Is the mystery

behind this painting!

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Assaf1981, what are you doing? This looks like a reposting of several of your already-posted poems, combined, in a difficult-to-read format. Explain this, because as of right now, I'm not seeing a clear reason why I shouldn't just delete it.

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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1 minute ago, tonyv said:

Assaf1981, what are you doing? This looks like a reposting of several of your already-posted poems, combined, in a difficult-to-read format. Explain this, because as of right now, I'm not seeing a clear reason why I shouldn't just delete it.

I am trying to get this noticed.

Oh, and I was writing this in iambic dimeter.

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It's okay to want to be noticed -- I've noticed all your poems, and they're good -- but re-posting to bump them is not okay. For example, I really like "Pinay with a Quarterstaff," a lot, but I just have not had time to do replies here. When I can devote the time, I will reply, but others have posted poems after that also. A legit remix of a poem is okay, but don't re-post stuff or combinations just to bump it. Furthermore, I myself intend to reply to "Pinay with a Quarterstaff" -- that one is nicely presented in a pleasing format, not one that bothers my tired, old eyes -- so when I do reply to that, I won't reply to this one. That one I want to reply to, this one I don't; it would just take too much time to get through it in this dark mode presentation.

I can't guarantee it, but I'll probably have some time between now and Tuesday to do some work here, so I'll try to get to "Pinay." I think you do nice work, and I'm excited that you choose to archive and showcase it here, but please be patient when it comes to replies, whether solicited or unsolicited.

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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