Assaf1981 Posted December 24, 2022 Posted December 24, 2022 She may be young, She may be small, She may even Be southeast Asian. Yet do not Discount her so soon, For she is nimble, And she is quick. This young lady, Barefoot, And wearing standard PT gear And wearing a small pin Depicting a flag: A red and blue flag, With a triangle At the hoist, Depicting a sun At it’s centre And three stars At each point Of the triangle; her country's flag! As said before, Discount her not, For looks do deceive. For, Behold; With her staff; She swings and thrusts, And parries, With the grace of a cat, Taking down All foes supernatural Winning it all, For her homeland, For her host country, And for her countrywomen In her special regiment, And even for her homeworld; The planet Earth! However, most importantly, she also fights For her Lord and Saviour, As evidenced by Her genuflecting, With her head bowed, And her staff held In an upright manner! See! Above her, against the unadorned Background, A pair of rings, Green, floating rings, Resembling eyes, Hover above, Seemingly spectral, To which she pays No notice. What are those rings? Are they the eyes Of a friend, Sent by her Lord And saviour to guide And protect Her and her regiment? Or are they the eyes of A supernatural Malefactor, The likes of which She is sworn to fight? That, dear reader Is the mystery behind this painting! Quote
tonyv Posted December 24, 2022 Posted December 24, 2022 Assaf1981, what are you doing? This looks like a reposting of several of your already-posted poems, combined, in a difficult-to-read format. Explain this, because as of right now, I'm not seeing a clear reason why I shouldn't just delete it. Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic
Assaf1981 Posted December 24, 2022 Author Posted December 24, 2022 1 minute ago, tonyv said: Assaf1981, what are you doing? This looks like a reposting of several of your already-posted poems, combined, in a difficult-to-read format. Explain this, because as of right now, I'm not seeing a clear reason why I shouldn't just delete it. I am trying to get this noticed. Oh, and I was writing this in iambic dimeter. Quote
tonyv Posted December 24, 2022 Posted December 24, 2022 It's okay to want to be noticed -- I've noticed all your poems, and they're good -- but re-posting to bump them is not okay. For example, I really like "Pinay with a Quarterstaff," a lot, but I just have not had time to do replies here. When I can devote the time, I will reply, but others have posted poems after that also. A legit remix of a poem is okay, but don't re-post stuff or combinations just to bump it. Furthermore, I myself intend to reply to "Pinay with a Quarterstaff" -- that one is nicely presented in a pleasing format, not one that bothers my tired, old eyes -- so when I do reply to that, I won't reply to this one. That one I want to reply to, this one I don't; it would just take too much time to get through it in this dark mode presentation. I can't guarantee it, but I'll probably have some time between now and Tuesday to do some work here, so I'll try to get to "Pinay." I think you do nice work, and I'm excited that you choose to archive and showcase it here, but please be patient when it comes to replies, whether solicited or unsolicited. Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic
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