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Eternal Bliss


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Assaf1981

Here, it is sunny,

Here, it’s always daylight,

Here, it’s peaceful,

Here, you can see the Earth,

Here, you will meet some long-lost relatives,

Here, there is no sickness,

Here, there is no wrath,

Here, there is no death,

Here, there is no grief,

Here, there is no pain of any kind,

Here, everyone wears white robes,

Here, it is multi-ethnic,

Here, harps play 24-7,

Here, everyone sings hallelujahs,

Here, the streets are paved with gold,

Here, everyone lives in mansions,

Here, winged men wander about,

Here, a majestic man clothed in light dwells,

Here, there are no video games,

Here, there are no sports,

Here, there are no novels,

Here, there are no movies,

Here, there is no adventure,

Here, there are no pets,

Here, there is no variety,

Here, there is no time,

Here, you come face-to-face with eternity,

Here, nothing ever changes,

Here, the routine is ongoing,

Here dwells eternal bliss,

Here dwells eternal monotony,

Here, it is called Heaven.

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David W. Parsley

Hi Assaf, quite imaginative in its structure and progression.  Perhaps your most skillful piece.

This poem plays off what I think is a common image many have of the afterlife.  Perhaps that image reflects a common desire to just rest from the struggle, to find something tranquil and certain to hold onto for as long as it can last (one main course of Eternity, please!), while also hanging onto the people one has known and loved in the mortal existence.  And it does sound insipid, huh?  "If this is Enlightenment, if this is the Ultimate Divine, maybe I should try achieving something else."

I admire the way the repeating "Here" embodies the monotony of such a vision, ironically invoking stock phrases from religious texts and folklore, even clever enough to slip in some features for the more "Woke" among us.  Something for everybody!  The final line represents the crowning satire, derisively nuanced by the observation that it is merely "called" Heaven by some who are there - a particularly nice touch following the two paired "dwells" statements.  I wonder if the poem would be even stronger without the two previous lines, though?  They seem redundant to what the poet has already developed before that and certainly to the three concluding lines that follow.  Just a thought.

Thanks (I think!),
 - Dave

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