My first poem... In radio script format!

[Assaf1981]

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FILIPINA

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

scene(1) int. studio – afternoon

narrator

For her regiment,

She undergoes training.

fx: group of soldiers foot stomping.

narrator

For her training,

She goes barefoot,

Donning black shorts,

Along with a

White short-sleeved t-shirt.

(beat)

For her countrywomen,

Wearing a pin

Of her country,

A certain archipelago

Located on the

Western Pacific Ocean,

In Southeast Asia,

On her t-shirt,

Showing her comradeship,

And her solidarity,

And her love

For her country.

music: phillipine anthem.

narrator

For her Lord and Saviour,

She genuflects, paying her respects.

music: worship music on piano.

narrator

For her fellow humans,

She takes the defence,

Fighting to protect us

From all supernatural harm!

(beat)

For the mysterious,

Spectral Green rings

Hovering just above

Her very head,

She does not

pay any regard.

fx: spooky music.

narrator

Yet there’s something

We must ask,

Something we’re curious

To know about

Those mysterious rings.

(beat)

Those mysterious rings,

What are they?

Are they eyes,

The eyes of

A friend sent

By her Lord

And Saviour to

Guide both her

And her friends,

Or are these

The eyes of

A supernatural malefactor,

The likes of

Which she is

Sworn to fight?

(beat)

If it’s the latter,

Then for her foes,

Her evil otherworldly foes,

She unleashes a flurry

Of incredibly fast attacks,

Using her long quarterstaff.

fx: swinging of quarterstaff.

filipina

Hiyaaa!

narrator

Surely, this very portrait

Captures all the essence

Of a pious warrior,

A strong spiritual warrior,

That does not battle

Mere flesh and blood,

But spiritual wickedness,

And against otherworldly wickedness,

In all high places.

music: spooky music.

fin

[Tinker]

This was hard to read because it is so spaced out.   At first, I thought there was nothing here. 

Uhmmm, I'm unsure what to think of this. Format is a page from a script but there is no dialog.  Although the "narrator" does talk  a lot.  By the way, you have a typo you might want to fix,  "defence" should be spelled "defense".  No biggee, it just jumped out at me. 

I liked the description of the Tshirt best.  That I could relate to.  I was just out at the northwestern Pacific Ocean on Saturday.   

I'll have to come back to this after I've had time to mull it over.

~~Tink

[Assaf1981]

20 hours ago, Tinker said:

This was hard to read because it is so spaced out.   At first, I thought there was nothing here. 

Uhmmm, I'm unsure what to think of this. Format is a page from a script but there is no dialog.  Although the "narrator" does talk  a lot.  By the way, you have a typo you might want to fix,  "defence" should be spelled "defense".  No biggee, it just jumped out at me. 

I liked the description of the Tshirt best.  That I could relate to.  I was just out at the northwestern Pacific Ocean on Saturday.   

I'll have to come back to this after I've had time to mull it over.

~~Tink

It is a poem in the form of a script.