Terry A Posted June 9, 2023 Share Posted June 9, 2023 (Until the Divine moves even the winds push nothing but dust.) The resistance to final count-down the repeated curtain calls terminal ends hanging interminably until eyes close and open no more. And the celebration of life riding precariously half-truths presented so carefully so as to not disturb those left behind Anxious to put it all behind them do laundry polish the car order the redecorators to continue. Such are some ends The great unremembering The partial recall The higher road even the forgiving. The great patsy of decorum shines beside the gates of hell -the open and close on rusty hinges And I watch and wait for a great silence to quell the weeping, for the black dog to walk away. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Terry A Posted June 9, 2023 Author Share Posted June 9, 2023 I did the -ing-thing again and so edited the poem. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted June 10, 2023 Share Posted June 10, 2023 Enjoyed this Terry, though I found it quite challenging to unpick phrases from the text, but found that exercise worthwhile. Terminal/interminably - like the play and the use of curtain calls in the context. Your play with half truths' struck a chord, as did the distraction list. The higher road of forgiveness 👍 Yep that black dog! I 'enjoyed' this poem muchly Phil Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Terry A Posted June 10, 2023 Author Share Posted June 10, 2023 Thanks Phil! Yep, poetry should be enjoyed- be sensuous, appeal to the imagination, expand understanding and meaning, cognitively open doors, like the flow of electricity with little shocks of originality. Mostly capture the human experience, give meaning to the times we live in. Should, should, should.........easier said than done (for me, anyway). Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Terry A Posted June 10, 2023 Author Share Posted June 10, 2023 When my parents got married, there were only a few pictures taken by relatives in the countryside. One showed a black dog standing in frame with them. When my Mother died in a ground floor palliative care room, at that very moment, a black dog was seen sitting outside the window looking in. Said, just to give some (unnecessary?) context to the poem. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted June 10, 2023 Share Posted June 10, 2023 Hi Terry I presume you are asking if I read that narrative. No, I didn't, but I can see that it is a fit for the poem. I read a relationship break-up and the black dog related to depression. Bw Phil Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Terry A Posted June 10, 2023 Author Share Posted June 10, 2023 I do not presume anything. In Canada, the funeral with its solemnity has been replaced by something called a 'celebration of life'. I thought that was sufficient clue as to the nature of the poem. No, the black dog was actually a critter. Anyway, i am belabouring and explaining my own poem and I hate to do that. Appreciate your comments. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted June 10, 2023 Share Posted June 10, 2023 Hi Terry, Your opening is awesome. Sets the tone and describes my life for the last year and half. I hate funerals and dread "celebrations of life" even more. My husband's ashes sit on a shelf waiting that time when my son and I can get together with the weather and simply go out beyond the bay and slip them into the deep. Which was his request. But I've been asked why on several occasions. I guess the mourning is not over until we get it done. ~~Judi Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted June 11, 2023 Share Posted June 11, 2023 'celebration of life'...now I see the key!😃 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Terry A Posted June 11, 2023 Author Share Posted June 11, 2023 Hi Phil, yes, it's a bit of a challenge sometimes to provide enough information in a poem to circle its meaning and then my realizing that some references might be too vague to unify the substance of the poem. Judi, only a year and a half since your husband passed? That's not long. By the determined vibrance of your poetry, it appears you are managing well as possible. By the mention of your son and grandson here and there, I can tell they are of great comfort. Water symbolizes life, so I can understand your husband's last wish to return to water. I think it does signify closure. Funerals used to be times where people greatly considered their own mortality and considered what might lay beyond, a worthwhile exercise for all. And gave grief a place to be expressed in sympathetic company. A time when the veils between worlds lifted even so slightly to those sensitive to such things. The expected joviality of some 'celebrations of life' render death too superficially to allow its meaning fulness. But it all varies, and I don't attend most. When my grandmother died, her funeral was in a little country cemetery. She was very old and the her few surviving friends (very old ladies, all dressed in black) walked in front of her coffin wailing as it was carried to the gravesite. That alone, to me as a young girl, brought the utter significance of her passing home. It seems almost macabre in retrospect but it had the intensity to imprint significance. Not the trailing off into oblivion the moderns practice so often now in their rites. 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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