To sing hallelujah And you are not Even a Christian

[Omar]

To sing hallelujah
And you are not
Even a Christian,
Maybe you don't
Believe in God at all.

To feel a snow flake
On the tip of your nose
And not wipe it,
Just let it thaw with
Your meek exhalation.

To sense a sting
In your heart
And let it go.
And all in a blink of
An eye
From a dim day to
A starry night
One feather flies
You away escaping
The branches.

And how the sea washes
Your salty feet with serenity.

To struggle to eat
To struggle to drink
At the end to live
When the sun is enough
to warm you.
 

[Terry A]

I like this poem. Don't think you need the first stanza which is superfluous to the rest of the poem, for the poem is not about the significance of religious belief; rather about how nature has a peace and serenity felt naturally and consolingly.

[Terry A]

To add- Omar you don't make a case for your first stanza, unless you incorporate its meaning somewhere else into the poem.

[Omar]

@Terry A thank you so much for your commentary, I really appreciate it. You are right this poem is not about the significance of religious beliefs but  the universal beauty of each entity even the things we created, Even the illusions we made. So in more depth this poem is about "let's pretend to matter, to enjoy, to believe"

[Tinker]

Hi Omar, Your first stanza reminded me of my friend Kit, who was a devout Jew but loved to attend Midnight Mass on Christmas Eve.  She relished the ritual and the music and the whole experience of a celebration of the birth of Christ. She did believe in God but practiced older traditions.  She died years ago but I loved her and it was good to have this reminder. Thank you.

Having said that,  I think Terry is right.  As soon as I moved on to the rest of the poem, I felt an immediate disconnect.  Maybe the first stanza could be a stand-alone poem, or expanded upon separate from this piece which I enjoyed very much.

~~Tink