Lubbo Posted December 24, 2023 Share Posted December 24, 2023 where are the moments with the wind rushing through the hometown day in day out? it always turned frisky when blowing your blonde hair about I feel like it´s gliding over the morning grass while getting a blonde scent like a black coffee with bright sunrise I long to meet you there again meet up there, where the busy main street made the world´s tempting stage at the secret place behind the school to recall the first wine and cigarette there, where the air was rippling with an enigmatic thrill and hope where stars reaching talks made the promises to stay together grow I´m walking around the home town with mind full of playful summer until I find there´s neither the frisky wind, nor your laughter the same old bell is ringing on the tower of then colourful dreams it sounds like a grave story stirring up chilling fears I´m staring at your pictures in search for the blond hair still in vain will never put up with it turned dark if I spot a sad look on your face Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted December 24, 2023 Share Posted December 24, 2023 I love the nostalgia, the wanting to go back but can’t go back in this one. Maybe sometimes we can. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lubbo Posted December 25, 2023 Author Share Posted December 25, 2023 Thank you for your comment. Yes, and as in this case, it's better to fail. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted December 30, 2023 Share Posted December 30, 2023 Hi Lubbo, This is the first I've read of your work and found it enticing. And a belated Welcome to PMO. Your piece reads rhythmically and pulls me forward at pretty fast pace for such long lines. There is an urgency and excitement at first and yet it slows to almost a dirge at the end. Skilled technique, interesting content, I look forward to reading more. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lubbo Posted January 1 Author Share Posted January 1 Thank you kindly for the positive comment and a brief expertise which motivates me to continue with writing. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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