Lubbo Posted January 17 Share Posted January 17 is it a mild winter or a wet and chilly summer? a walk through the town makes me wonder bare trees line deserted streets the twisted and starved twigs stretch to the careless sky ignore befriended houses put to sleep by a colourless dye bent wheels of an empty tram drive me home until in a bend the last stop clears my dream of snow I grab the skis and hit the road Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted January 17 Share Posted January 17 3 hours ago, Lubbo said: is it a mild winter or a wet and chilly summer? a walk through the town makes me wonder bare trees line deserted streets the twisted and starved twigs stretch to the careless sky ignore befriended houses put to sleep by a colourless ice dye steel wheels of an empty tram drive me home until in a bend the last stop clears my dream of snow I grab the skis and hit the road Enjoyed. I have made some suggestions, but they are just options. Did you do the artwork? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lubbo Posted January 17 Author Share Posted January 17 No, it´s a free internet image. Do you mean some improvements to the poem? If so, they´re very welcome. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted January 18 Share Posted January 18 Not sure I call them improvements, just options (the suggested edits are in my initial response, in the quoted text) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lubbo Posted January 18 Author Share Posted January 18 Sorry, I didn´t expand the text with your options (had no idea of them used in it). They are actually improvements in my opinion. Thank you very much! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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