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is it a mild winter or a wet and chilly summer?

a walk through the town makes me wonder

bare trees line deserted streets

the twisted and starved twigs

stretch to the careless sky

ignore befriended houses

put to sleep by a colourless dye

 

bent wheels of an empty tram

drive me home until in a bend

the last stop clears my dream of snow

I grab the skis and hit the road

 

 

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3 hours ago, Lubbo said:

is it a mild winter or a wet and chilly summer?

a walk through the town makes me wonder

bare trees line deserted streets

the twisted and starved twigs

stretch to the careless sky

ignore befriended houses

put to sleep by a colourless ice dye

 

steel wheels of an empty tram

drive me home until in a bend

the last stop clears my dream of snow

I grab the skis and hit the road

 

Enjoyed. I have made some suggestions, but they are just options. Did you do the artwork?

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No, it´s a free internet image. Do you mean some improvements to the poem? If so, they´re very welcome.

Posted

Not sure I call them improvements, just options (the suggested edits are in my initial response, in the quoted text)

Posted

Sorry, I didn´t expand the text with your options (had no idea of them used in it). They are actually improvements in my opinion. Thank you very much!

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