Aleksandra Posted May 28, 2009 Share Posted May 28, 2009 All night, while my old bones creep and the scream hits my heart, musty boxes of memories are my nightly friend... Craven sang the song - one day, The child had grown and flown as a bird to the lands - so far... Years - hard as stones are a burden on my chest. You can see them in the lines on my face. Empty promises, the bitter taste of tears, open hands await... mouth full of prayers. " God, let this damned cuckoo fill her heart and eyes again, and then - then kill her. It is dawn. The musty boxes of memories can't die in peace... Ok I must note that this prompt I have done before in the prose prompts. So I used the same ones. I am exercising with this - using the same one story and same one to put in poetry form. So I am not sure how it works - you gonna tell about that :D . here is the link where the same story is posted. Thank you for reading. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted May 28, 2009 Share Posted May 28, 2009 Hi Aleksandra, I like how you've used the prompts to give another version of your prose piece in this densely imaged poem. As I've noted in the other forum - you convey such anguish and loss - inconsolable and deeply moving. The contrast between the ominous "Craven" and the noisy/singing "Cuckoo", representing the coming of Spring, underlines the pervading sadness in your poem. goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 28, 2009 Author Share Posted May 28, 2009 Thank you goldenlangur for your nice words. I try to " play " a little bit with all of this, and it is going hard to me. I like it how you see the contrast between "Craven" and "Cuckoo" Thank you for sharing your thoughts. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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