I Want To Dance In The Wind

[Larsen M. Callirhoe]

I Want To Dance In The Wind

 

 

Hold me, touch me, lift me up,

I want to dance in the wind.

Please me, release me,

I want to walk on the clouds.

 

See me, hear me,

my voice is crying out loud.

I need you you like clouds

that need water to rain down

on us all.

 

Softly, loudly, I know I need you

by my side to release me from my fears.

All my love is in a whirlwind.

 

I want to dance amongst the stars

and drink wine until I am drunk.

I see a new star born in the sky

that is just a child playing in heaven.

[tonyv]

Hello Victor,

 

I remember this one from our old home. It's one of my favorites of yours.

 

I think the first line of the second strophe is particularly strong:

See me, hear me...

This is a plea that cries out like a demand, almost rising to the level of an outright command. Then, you go on to confirm your own neediness here:

I need you you like clouds

that need water to rain down

on us all

... and to reveal your desires here:

I want to dance amongst the stars

and drink wine until I am drunk.

This one is compact and polished; I like the layout on the page. Thanks also for including the romantic graphic.

 

Tony

[goldenlangur]

^{nature mirrors love}

 

 

 

Hello Victor,

 

 

It's wonderful to read this again - I love how you use a whole gamut of images of nature to show the intensity of feelings in your poem. The voice is one of passion, vigor and celebration!

 

 

 

goldenlangur

[Aleksandra]

Ah Victor my friend. You know how much I love this poem. I love the imageries and the passion inside.

 

Thank you for sharing here again.

 

Aleksandra

[JoelJosol]

Victor, you made your poem dance with its lifting tone and rhythm.

[Tinker]

Hi Victor, This was a delight to read. I felt a freedom in dancing among the clouds. And I loved the last line. I think this is one of your best.

 

~~Tink

[Larsen M. Callirhoe]

thanks everyone for your comments. i love the picture aleks dug-up for this one. it really makes the poem.'

 

victor