Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted April 21, 2009 Share Posted April 21, 2009 I Want To Dance In The Wind Hold me, touch me, lift me up, I want to dance in the wind. Please me, release me, I want to walk on the clouds. See me, hear me, my voice is crying out loud. I need you you like clouds that need water to rain down on us all. Softly, loudly, I know I need you by my side to release me from my fears. All my love is in a whirlwind. I want to dance amongst the stars and drink wine until I am drunk. I see a new star born in the sky that is just a child playing in heaven. Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted April 21, 2009 Share Posted April 21, 2009 Hello Victor, I remember this one from our old home. It's one of my favorites of yours. I think the first line of the second strophe is particularly strong: See me, hear me...This is a plea that cries out like a demand, almost rising to the level of an outright command. Then, you go on to confirm your own neediness here:I need you you like cloudsthat need water to rain down on us all ... and to reveal your desires here:I want to dance amongst the starsand drink wine until I am drunk. This one is compact and polished; I like the layout on the page. Thanks also for including the romantic graphic. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted April 21, 2009 Share Posted April 21, 2009 nature mirrors love Hello Victor, It's wonderful to read this again - I love how you use a whole gamut of images of nature to show the intensity of feelings in your poem. The voice is one of passion, vigor and celebration! goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted April 21, 2009 Share Posted April 21, 2009 Ah Victor my friend. You know how much I love this poem. I love the imageries and the passion inside. Thank you for sharing here again. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted April 21, 2009 Share Posted April 21, 2009 Victor, you made your poem dance with its lifting tone and rhythm. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted April 21, 2009 Share Posted April 21, 2009 Hi Victor, This was a delight to read. I felt a freedom in dancing among the clouds. And I loved the last line. I think this is one of your best. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted July 20, 2009 Author Share Posted July 20, 2009 thanks everyone for your comments. i love the picture aleks dug-up for this one. it really makes the poem.' victor Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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