Tinker Posted June 14, 2009 Posted June 14, 2009 3 haiku, kid parole - hummingbird - poet to reader sun drenched days of June perennial kid parole the child in me smiles *** small bird sips nectar floats on invisible wings nature's hovercraft *** tiny bird hovers on invisible wings sweet morning glory *** words placed on page pass to the soul through eyes and ears poet to reader Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com
dr_con Posted June 14, 2009 Posted June 14, 2009 Nice Tinker! Clean and profound reflections, enjoyed them all! DC Quote thegateless.org
tonyv Posted June 14, 2009 Posted June 14, 2009 The tranquility in these haiku delights, Tinker. When all three are taken together (the way you have shared them here), the result is a macrocosm: the three poems represent lines of a haiku with the last one serving as that "a-ha" moment. I like how you adhere to the syllable count. In this case, I think doing so helps reinforce the idea of that "coherent whole" which I mentioned above. Perhaps the thoughts aren't so random? Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic
Aleksandra Posted June 14, 2009 Posted June 14, 2009 words placed on page pass I loved the third poem Tink. I enjoyed all three poems. Thank you. Alek Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia
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