Tinker Posted June 16, 2009 Share Posted June 16, 2009 One Two Three, Ring! The goal was set last June when in a loss they heard the tune of victory for other men. Defeated then. Through eighty two their mantra grew to send a message round the bend that they would be the champs they revved up all the amps. Then playoffs tested heart and grit and they proved up for it. Yes, it came true, L.A. Lakers gained their due! ---Judi Van Gorder Congratulations to the LA Lakers on winning the NBA Championship! Go Lakers! Sorry, got caught up in the moment and just discovered a 16th century French verse form and I thought I'd experiment with it. Freie Verse Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rhymeguy Posted June 16, 2009 Share Posted June 16, 2009 I knew somehow before reading the last line that you were celebrating the Lakers. While I am not a fan of the game it has been hard to miss the drama. What is the story behind the "Laker Hater" phenomenon that I have heard about? As far as the poem goes, well written and fun to read. I of course like that it rhymes. A great tribute and nicely presented. rg Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted June 16, 2009 Share Posted June 16, 2009 I liked how you applied the old form to a contemporary subject, Tinker. The whole thing flows quite well, but I think my favorite part has to be "they revved up all the amps." Very clever. Enjoyed this occasional poem. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted June 30, 2009 Share Posted June 30, 2009 Tinker agree with the above- Personally I don't care much for organized sports, despite the occasional soccer fiending- But this was a lovely spontaneous adaption of an old form to fit your immediate and enthusiastic needs;-) DC Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted July 7, 2009 Share Posted July 7, 2009 Go Lakers, Go Tinker! :-) Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted July 7, 2009 Share Posted July 7, 2009 Tony would say this is a contemporary 14-line sonnet-like poem. It has its turn. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pawn shop Posted July 7, 2009 Share Posted July 7, 2009 Go Celtics ! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted July 7, 2009 Author Share Posted July 7, 2009 Thanks guys.... I am still smiling... ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted July 11, 2009 Share Posted July 11, 2009 Hi Tink, I like how you capture the build-up to that moment: Through eighty twotheir mantra grew to send a message round the bend that they would be the champs Congratulations :wine: Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted July 19, 2009 Share Posted July 19, 2009 go Miami Heat! Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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