Tinker Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 a July 4th xiaoshi and haiku Gathering tangy taste of barbeque sweet corn drips butter taste of love shared with friends------------- --jvg new neighbors embraced by old friends our circle expands------------- ---jvg I am still playing with verse form. Well this isn't really a verse form but a "subgenre" from the 1920s of Chinese poetry called xiaoshi which I believe means "small poem" (shi = poetry and xiao = little, diminutive or small). The xiaoshi should be fragmented with minimal explanation, seemingly unrelated images and little indication of cause and effect. Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 Hi Tink, Two great poems to mark your experience of a special day! Never tried a xiaoshi. You make it seem so effortless! Warmth and joie de' vivre come across in both the xiaoshi and the haiku/senryu. goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 Nice work Tink, I admire you how good you are with all of those forms. You are never tired with trying. Seems you are not lazy as me . The poems works so well and that form I never met before, at least that title of the form xiaoshi But I like how it sounds and looks. Thank you for sharing this wonderful work with us Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted May 20, 2009 Author Share Posted May 20, 2009 Thank you gl, these small poems were a reaction to the day. Aleks, thank you. The xiaoshi really isn't a form but a style of writing. It doesn't have the restrictions of form. I am glad you enjoyed my small poems. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 Tinker wrote: Gathering tangy taste of barbeque sweet corn drips butter taste of love shared with friends new neighbors embraced by old friends our circle expands For me, the third line of the xiaoshi has a double meaning. It seems to refer to both the food and the atmosphere of the event. I like the last line of the haiku. It resonates with hospitality. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodyday Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 new neighbors embraced by old friends our circle expands the first line has the cause second line has the act and the third line has the consequence excellent orientation of words and rhythm and it has diversifies with the feelings of belongingness! and your first xiaoshi makes me hungry! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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