Tinker Posted June 6, 2019 Share Posted June 6, 2019 When in the Woods Settling into stillness, spine straight, shoulders relaxed, lines from a Robert Frost poem glide through my thoughts, images never lost. Settling into stillness I open to the sounds of a grey squirrel up high gathering for winter and never asking why. Settling into stillness, a single beetle crawls across a lacy fern, graceful feathered leaves fan to usher my return. Settling into stillness, the minutes drop away Pain and joy become one, one moment, one lifetime, one with the silent sun. ~~ Judi Van Gorder Rewrite of an old one. Original Verse Form: Monchielle Stanza Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted June 8, 2019 Share Posted June 8, 2019 Tink, there is something pleasantly evocative about this serene piece. I like the way you bring Frost in as a sort of poetic bridge to how the narrator's experience is shaped. Thanks, - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted June 9, 2019 Author Share Posted June 9, 2019 Thanks David. So nice to see you back. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted June 10, 2019 Share Posted June 10, 2019 hi Tink, I enjoyed the addition of the beetle stanza. The break on Frost is a little rhyme driven. Quote Settling into stillness, the minutes drop away Sill appreciate that. best badge Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted June 16, 2019 Share Posted June 16, 2019 I have to say I love how you've applied the form. As for Frost, I think it works. Then again, I'm not a rhyme hater. I also think Frost is appropriate because the poem echoes of "Stopping by Woods on a Snowy Evening." A very nice read. Tony PS -- While I do use rhyme from time to time ... ah, that wasn't intentional ... in my own poems, I can take it or leave it. It's just another poetic device, a tool, as far as I'm concerned. Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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