Omar Posted December 20, 2021 Share Posted December 20, 2021 Should I live?......Should I die? And The sun upon my head let dream Of meeting the moon. Perfect, ecstasy so slow,volatilizing To the azure carpet. Disappearing from the old snow, And the river beyond me let flow, And the gray wooden village sink, The broken damsel let weep Upon her white- washed Swain. Blue to green, A wish ,a dream A nightmare. A heart-wrenching calamity. -all so odorless- -all too clear- that all is the same. Ascending" something" After hundreds of years, Defined cannot be. At last incurably unkown. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted January 1, 2022 Share Posted January 1, 2022 Omar, I love the metaphysical sensibility which presents from the get-go: "Should I live?......Should I die?" I don't sense any negativity in those questions; they're just questions. A detached, favorable mood manifests itself in the first stanza: "azure carpet," "old snow," and "gray wooden village". And despite the mention of "nightmare," "blue to green" and "a wish, a dream" collide with the slightly more clinical, yet not displeasingly so, "odorless" to round out the poem. Well done! Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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