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louder than drum beats

your harsh words repeat in my head

leaving me hollow

 

 

leaving me hollow

like a drum

your good-bye poem

 

 

I'm so glad to see Tinker again. I've learned a lot from her polishing my Haiku translation. If I happen to have made some progress in writing haiku, you know whose help I've got from. icon_biggrin.png

 

Tony, the line "your good-bye poem" really hurts. icon_sad.gif

 

your good-bye poem

is poison. the world won't be

the same again.

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goldenlangur
starting over

closer than a similie

tighter than a metaphor

 

tighter than a metaphor

our grasp of hands, crossing

this rope bridge

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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starting over

closer than a similie

tighter than a metaphor

 

tighter than a metaphor

our grasp of hands, crossing

this rope bridge

 

goldenlangur

 

"this rope bridge", great image.

 

this rope bridge -

my heart swings

in the air

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"this rope bridge", great image.

 

this rope bridge -

my heart swings

in the air

 

 

Thank you Lake icon_smile.gif And a most appropriate response you've posted! It is quite unnerving!

 

in the air

smell of orange blossoms

memories of you

 

 

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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memories of you

grow stronger

as autumn deepens

 

as autumn deepens

how loud the morning traffic -

bare trees

 

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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memories of you

grow stronger

as autumn deepens

 

as autumn deepens

how loud the morning traffic -

bare trees

 

 

goldenlangur

 

how loud the morning traffic

drives me insane

nothing like a cup of coffee

Larsen M. Callirhoe

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how loud the morning traffic

drives me insane

nothing like a cup of coffee

 

Brilliant vic icon_smile.gif

 

nothing like a cup of coffee

after a night of winds -

morning sun

 

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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hi GL,

 

i couldve said

 

bare trees

whistle in the wind

leaves sing to me

 

 

 

moring sun

morning dew

the sun rises in the east

Larsen M. Callirhoe

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moring sun

morning dew

the sun rises in the east

 

vic, it's fine whichever line you take. Good to read your haiku icon_smile.gif

 

the sun rises in the east

but how short its journey

another dusk

 

 

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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the sun rises in the east

but how short its journey

another dusk

 

another dusk

birds back to their nests

a lone traveler

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another dusk

birds back to their nests

a lone traveler

 

a lone traveler

Whispering to the monsoon

A tale of deception

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a lone traveler

Whispering to the monsoon

A tale of deception

 

a tale of deception

in these eyes

without words

 

 

 

goldenlangur

Edited by goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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a tale of deception

in these eyes

without words

 

without words

without rhymes

poems dream of lifeless smiles

 

 

 

RoNy in Melancholy! icon_cry.gif

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without words

without rhymes

poems dream of lifeless smiles

 

 

 

RoNy in Melancholy! icon_cry.gif

 

 

Sympathy RoNy - but how poetic your melancholy!

 

poems dream of lifeless smiles

the valley and the sun

in fog

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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poems dream of lifeless smiles

the valley and the sun

in fog

 

goldenlangur

 

in fog

a war between angels and demons

- captivity.

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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in fog

a war between angels and demons

- captivity.

 

 

captivity

without the car radio

evening rush hour

 

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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captivity

without the car radio

evening rush hour

 

 

evening rush hour

once you sit beside

catching dreams like fireflies….

 

 

RoNy tastes tears

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evening rush hour

once you sit beside

catching dreams like fireflies….

 

 

RoNy tastes tears

 

catching dreams like fireflies

that reflect Rony’s tears

a bright moon

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catching dreams like fireflies

that reflect Rony's tears

a bright moon

 

a bright moon

Blunders so stained

lake dreams of shiny beauty

 

 

RonY mutes Symphony

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a bright moon

Blunders so stained

lake dreams of shiny beauty

 

Excellent response Lake!

 

lake dreams of shiny beauty

memories of Orion

this starless night

 

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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lake dreams of shiny beauty

memories of Orion

this starless night

 

 

Thanks Golden. I'm just recycling Rony's words. icon_smile.gif

 

this starless night

makes no difference to him-

a blind man

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this starless night

makes no difference to him-

a blind man

 

It takes a certain knack to do that Lake! You're being modest!

 

 

a blind man

still feels

the morning sun

 

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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a blind man

still feels

the morning sun

 

Come on people cheer up icon_smile.gif.

 

Rony, come on, smile icon_wink.gificon_smile.gif

the morning sun

falls silent

keeps the secret

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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a blind man

still feels

the morning sun

 

Come on people cheer up icon_smile.gif.

 

Rony, come on, smile icon_wink.gificon_smile.gif

the morning sun

falls silent

keeps the secret

 

Thanks Lake, Goldenlangur, Alek. i am trying and this is the least i could do!

 

keeps the secret

the sun behind the thunder

-cloud cries

 

 

RoNy, dreaming Spring!

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keeps the secret

the sun behind the thunder

-cloud cries

 

 

RoNy, dreaming Spring!

 

cloud cries

then spring smiles, how beautiful

a singing bird!

 

 

(Learned from Golden's "how swiftly/they're gone")

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cloud cries

then spring smiles, how beautiful

a singing bird!

 

 

You're very generous Lake. How well this train is chugging along icon_smile.gif

 

a singing bird

on the bare cherry tree

the cat watches

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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the cat watches

a mouse, unaware of

a dog behind

 

a dog behind

a pile of newspapers -

morning headline

 

 

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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goldenlangur
morning headline

printed in bloody red

weeping flowers

 

weeping flowers -

a bouquet by a tree

on the highway

 

 

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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weeping flowers -

a bouquet by a tree

on the highway

 

 

on the highway

tinkling jingling dancing queen

tears unseen......

 

 

 

RoNy sheds debts!

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on the highway

tinkling jingling dancing queen

tears unseen......

 

 

 

RoNy sheds debts!

 

 

tears unseen

in the dark -

a burnt candle

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tears unseen

in the dark -

a burnt candle

 

Beautiful!, Lake.

 

a burnt candle

among unused plates -

last dinner

 

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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a burnt candle

among unused plates -

last dinner

 

last dinner

never participate

recalling your songs..................

 

 

RoNy sounds Cr@Zy!

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last dinner

never participate

recalling your songs..................

 

 

RoNy sounds Cr@Zy!

 

The creed of a poet is madness of sorts icon_wink.gif

 

 

recalling your song

even the moon

weeps

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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weeps

then smiles

the changing weather

 

Your haiku keeps getting better and better, Lake!

 

the changing weather

how like your mood

every morning

 

 

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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Your haiku keeps getting better and better, Lake!

 

the changing weather

how like your mood

every morning

 

 

 

goldenlangur

 

Lake writes tremendous, does he know? i think he should know!

 

 

every morning

while jasmine smiles

in foggy sunshine

 

 

rONy shivers alone!

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every morning

while jasmine smiles

in foggy sunshine

 

 

rONy shivers alone!

 

Golden and Rony, your words made me blush. In fact, Golden's composed wisdom and Rony's unrestrained mind are all inspiring. Thanks!

 

in foggy sunshine

how beautiful

a blooming camellia

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in foggy sunshine

how beautiful

a blooming camellia

 

 

 

a blooming camellia

a little madness in air

-tears disappear!

 

 

rONy hEeaRS WhIspERs!

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a blooming camellia

a little madness in air

-tears disappear!

 

 

rONy hEeaRS WhIspERs!

 

Great exchanges here Lake and RoNy icon_smile.gif

 

tears disappear

with Orion at dawn -

another day

 

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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another day

another destiny.

Pandora box.

 

 

Pandora box.

remembering Lara croft

saving the world icon_razz.gif

 

 

RoNy exiles smiles! fresse.png

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Pandora box.

remembering Lara croft

saving the world icon_razz.gif

 

 

RoNy exiles smiles! fresse.png

 

Love your little notes, RoNy - gives this train a certain air of fun icon_biggrin.png

 

saving the world

we need words

not guns

 

 

Thinking of the Mumbai victims.

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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not guns

but spears used

in primitive times

 

in primitive times

a different race

the enemy

 

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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